Bittersweet - Comments

This story has such emotion in it. I don't usually feel too emotional when I read a story, but I did as I read this on. It's so beautiful and heartwrenching. Fantastic job on it.

Okay so right off the bat I fell in love with your layout. There were just two things I didn't love and that was the colored background for the story content and the pinkish colored text. But other than that I simply loved the layout, it was simple and beautiful. Grammar was excellent was well, there were a few sentences that felt run-on-ish to me. I feel like some of the super long sentences in the beginning you could have broken off into two or three sentences and it still would have had the same effect. Story content was outstanding. The way you wrote it was something I haven't read before and it kept me interested the whole time. All of my questions were answered by the end and it left me with a sad feeling, but it also left me satisfied. I think you ended the story in a way were the reader doesn't need to know more, closure is there and although it may be sad at least there is closure. Overall I loved the story, the layout, the whole thing and I praise you for your excellent writing and writing style.

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I meant, I'd call the guy Jeremy. Gosh! I really should start checking before posting. Damn all this typing error. ^_^

First word out of my mouth after I read this: "Awh!"
In a sad and admiring way that is haha.

I was a bit skeptical as I was reading this because I dislike the usage of 'you' when talking about another character rather than the audience itself. It's sort of weirds me out since I've grown out of my Quizilla stage I suppose. haha. but the layout was fantastic. It was absolutely adorable and the way the main character knows that she can move on, knowing that the one she loves will always be happy made my heart all sad and happy fluttering. I really enjoyed this! If I could rate it I'd give it 5 gold stars hun <3

Well done!

This is beautiful. I love how you describe everything. It's just so realistic. Even though I'm not quite sure what happened between these two characters that make them break up but I'm glad you don't tell everything straight. It gives more space for me to imagine the back story.

I also love the fact that you don't name your characters. In my head, I call the girl Andrea, the girl Jeremy and the wife Linda. ^_^

Maybe it's just me, or the PMS, but this made me cry for literally 15 minutes straight. Excellent writing, excellent description, simply excellent story. It touched me in a place I'm trying to live without.

<3 Viki