Whore Makeup - Comments

Wow

Wow, this is incredible. Your description is so blunt, but beautiful in a way. I really admire how you've taken something that most people on here try to over-glamorise, and made it seem as real as it can be. The recurring mentioning of red really does tie the story together perfectly, and all of the negative connotations that you've added in at the end that add to the whole red being bad theme are fantastic. Your character is very well thought out, and her personality shines across the page even though you've only had the space of a one-shot to completely embellesh her.

All in all, fantastic. Add the fact that I couldn't see any spelling or grammar errors whatsoever and you've got a pretty damn amazing piece here. I wish you all the best of luck in the contest it's entered in :)

So I just kind of randomly stumbled across this and it looked really good. I loved the layout and the one sentence summary; it gave a general jist of what the story would be about without giving too much away. I loved the title too; it was kind of just blunt. Right off the bat, I loved the character; it's obvious that she doesn't like what she does but it's kind of necessary. At least, that's the impression I got.

Even though I'm only a few paragraphs in, I love how you're kind of doing the opposite of glamorizing prostitution. You're not showing it to be a good thing; you're showing the truly negative side effects, like being judged. I really loved that. I seriously loved this piece in general; it was so honest and so very well-written, especially those last few paragraphs. It was very bleak as well; there was genuinely no hope in this. Nonetheless, you definitely used your prompt very well; good luck in the contest this is entered in, you deserve to place! :D

This was a very compelling story and gave me a new outlook on this particular occupation. The main character was so life-like without needing a name and her thoughts and insecurities were fresh and raw. You most definitely have a way with words and your writing can tug at a reader’s emotions. I adore the ending with all the references to red, especially the ex-boyfriend bit because I thought it added a bit of humor to a harsh story. The fact that you didn’t need tons of dialogue to make this great was amazing. I only noticed one mistake, “She sauntered in and turned to watch him close and lock the door.” I think it should be ‘locked the door.’ Other than that this was a terrific one-shot and I wish you luck in your contest!

I love how you can feel her pain and anger in this. You can taste her disgust. I'm also glad you didn't get carried away with the sex scene, just kept to the character and the point. I also have a temporary disgust for red. =)
Wonderful job, I'm sure you'll do well in the portfolio contest =)

This is crazy... like deep cray cray... but i <3 it... you write like the best stuffs ever I swear

Woah.

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whoever is in the banner has extremely nice hair :)