Blue Blood - Comments

This is brilliant.
Just the first chapter was amazing and I love it and I subscribed and this story makes my life better.
Lots of ands...and this is a crappy comment, lol.
But seriously, I really like this guise.

Wow.
It's really interesting, and the story idea is just...very stony ground to walk on so I tip my hat to your bravery in that aspect!
But, as the others have said, Plot line. Maybe in the next chapter, you could include more information, history, etc. Otherwise, great job and keep up the good work.

I agree with silk tea. about the plot-line. I saw this in the story comment swap thread, but Billie had already claimed it. The title drew me in, so I clicked on it. Then the layout interested me, then the summary made me proceed to hit the subscribe button. I didn't have time to read the chapter at first, so I subscribed so I would better my ability on finding it again. Now, this wasn't something I was expecting at all; I'll call it what my cousin calls it. He calls it gaycest. Aha, but I really wasn't expecting that and I had assumed Dallas was a girl. Not sure why, perhaps the crossing of the legs. I've never seen a guy do that when he's arroused. But anyway, though this isn't something I normally read, it's caught my interest. It's very well written and the first chapter just sort of made me curious. I like Dallas already. But yes, congrats on being able to make me stay subscribed to a gaycest. Just please don't make it like a sleazy porno. As I said, great job! Let me know when you update, dear.

Alright then...well, personally the subject and plotline of this story is not something I enjoy at all. I'm completely against anything incest-related, and that makes it even more weird to me that it's two brothers. Bleck, all I can think of is my own big brother and how nasty that would be. But that's besides the point, I've expressed my feelings of the plotline. The writing is good, but I feel like there could be more to it. Maybe a bit more emotion, or a bit of detail. Kind of maybe an angst underlying battle in Dallas about his feelings for his brother? I think that would play out nicely.

Otherwiese, great job, sorry if my dislike in plotline offended you.