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lalalovesyou (100)

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I will... I feel lazy today though...sooooo...

June 25th, 2011 at 07:41pm

Hello.Kitteh (100)

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laurennnn(: write more please

June 25th, 2011 at 07:09pm

lalalovesyou (100)

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Thank you. I will try to fix the spacing. And this isnt just a story about Haily, This is also about Brian, her second cousin, who she is now going to live with.

June 14th, 2011 at 07:38pm

K. Taylor (100)

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I really like where the story is going, you just lost me at the start of the second chapter.

The story is also bunched up, spacing it out more will appeal to the eye better. There are also a few grammatical errors as well as sentence construction.

Maybe read over the chapters one last time before posting? The story is very well thought out, and I enjoyed reading it

June 14th, 2011 at 07:10pm