Cash In Now Honey - Comments

I thought i was subrscribed to this story, turned out I commented on it after you started writing it and never subscribed, well I am caught up and you have me wanting more. Keep up the good work and thank you for commenting on my new story.

Keep writing. Even if it's bits and pieces. no matter how crazy life can be. I use a program called Q10, it's pretty cool and is great to use if you want to bring up your writing game a bit.

Anyways. Luke and his crush and the bracelet, a little bit of a curve ball. I think the bracelet bit was predictable, but well written and a nice touch at the end regardless of the cliche.

Please keep writing.

Loved the update and can't wait to see if anything happens with Luke.And also what happens with Mase when he realizes what he did when he gets sober.

I just read this entire story, and I must say I like it quite a bit :)
Update soon, please!

We always read! Well, I do. I just don't generally comment unless I can offer some kind of Constructive criticism. It's a good story so keep writing and don't be afraid to push yourself to write better or get more creative.
I always suggest the writer to think as though they were describing a painting of a sailboat to someone who is blind. Is it just a sailboat in some water or is it a sailboat fighting the wind with whitecaps on the water, clouds dark and stormy.
I like to see the characters internal thought process. What is she feeling or thinking?

I feel like I write better after reading a book too so don't be afraid to step back and explore your school or local library, you never know what will inspire you!

Loved the story and the update!

Wow this update is good, hope to see more coming soon. It will be interesting to see how her relationship with Mason develops with the fact that Scotty is always there and he happens to be her ex...can't wait for more.

I really like this so far. I can't wait to read more.

Just a suggestion. You should space your story out meaning skip a line between paragraphs and dialogue to make it easier to read. Plus I know some mods and other readers are sticklers for that. I got reported for not spacing awhile ago and had to fix the whole thing.