Could it be you? - Comments

I like the story, but your main character just seems... Shallow? Superficial?
Like, her and Finn have been together for a day and they're getting drunk and having sex?
It's a good story, but maybe work on your characters a little more for future stories?

Very interesting new story.

It's a really good story, so i hope you update soon! I agree with Rachel; Dyanmite on the starting a new paragraph for dialogue because when i was reading i was getting a little bit confused on who was talking. Can't wait for the next chapter (:

This is a good story, but here's a few things you need to keep in mind:

1. This part of the title: (a Finn Hudson romance)
Should be taken out. It's considered a tag, which isn't allowed in story titles.

2. Remember to start a new paragraph between each line of dialogue. For example:

"Wake up sweetie" my mom chimed on my first day of school, "I’m up" i yawned out and sat up stretching.

should be this:

"Wake up sweetie" my mom chimed on my first day of school.
"I’m up" i yawned out and sat up stretching.

3. Please remember to use proper spelling, grammar and capitalization in the stories.

Overall, other than the things above, it's a good story. I don't understand the fandom because I've never seen Glee, but it's a good story.