Marathons and Parking Garages - Comments

wow. that was completely phenomenal. it was hot as hell.
you're an excellent writer. i know i said that in a previous comment, but it's the truth. your detailing is perfect and that story was great.
brownie points for everything.
good luck in the contest(:

Bravo, very well done! (:

I especially loved how you portrayed Logan's appearance so well, aswell as everything else. You managed to level a good amount of comedy and serious-ness, which is great considering that many writers stories are either completely dull or have an excessive amount of comedy.

Continue with your writing, you're very talented.
(:

Wow. This was great. And not just because I have a dirty mind and I love smut... :3
Your an excellent writer, and the way you described things was beautiful. The sex scene was passionate and well written, as well as the rest of the story, of course! I have nothing bad to say here. It was perfect.
I'm looking forward to read more of your work :D

Seriously? This was really freaking amazing.
I gave up on finding good BTR stories until I found this page.
I'll definitely be reading more of your writing <3

Here's the first comment you've won. xD I will honestly say, you write the best smut I've read. (Ive read a lot. xD) The fact that it's Logan is just a thousand times better. (: I absolutely love the line about him "beatboxing to himself while he was microwaving his East Mac." XD for some reason, that made me laugh hysterically.

And the Supernatural influence is a freaking great idea. xD I love love love Supernatural. xD

now, I'm off to read more of your smut. >:D

Wow, just wow. That was amazing dear. It truly put me in the mood. Haha!
This was the first smut I read of any BTR member. I'm glad I hadn't either.
I love your word usage. Much luck dear <3

I don't know if it was intentional or not but I loved the color choices of the layout. The fact that you used brown fleur de lis/ flowery patter made me think of his coffee-brown eyes (don't know why but it did). The personality of the characters were believable too.

I think my favorite paragraph was: "It was obvious that he hadn’t formulated a clear backstory, or any storyline, for that matter. After all, he was an actor, not a screenwriter, but she did appreciate the effort."

The way the sky was described as "an array of lavender and creamsicle orange." was very pretty in my mind :)

>>For once, she didn’t try to rob him of control, blinded the raw passion of his every movement.
I feel as if a word is missing here but I may be wrong

It kind of threw me off after they got in the car and suddenly they're having sex but I suppose when the mood is right you just can't help yourself ;P And I must add that was one passionate scene

Interesting dream… Not gonna lie

First Logan Henderson smut for me and I'm glad it was :) Sorry not really any constructive criticism in this. I'm more of a grammar nazi than a proofreader but aside from that one sentence I pointed out earlier I can't construct what's already been sturdily built (okay that was corny but true)