first things first! layout is perfect. simple. yet amazing. it doesnt distract me while im reading which a HUGE plus. :D And the photo is beautiful. i love it. I really like the story and I plan on sticking to this one but one small problem. Space the text a little more? found that bugging me a bit throughout reading. Other than that it's great, beautifully written and im physced for more. :D
Wow this is amazing. Action already in the first chapter. You totally had me hooked at the first sentence. Please update soon! I'll be checking on this story. :)
Layout: Beautiful. The picture is wonderful, and the story is easy to read. One suggestion: I'd break up the text a little. So many long paragraphs at once aren't easy to read, and aren't very inviting.
The story: Killing was a bad thing... it was frowned upon. These bits really got me. I loved that - had myself a little giggle at it. Honestly, I love this story. I can't wait to see the next chapter, and the style of it makes me want to read again. I will definitely be recc-ing this out.