Special K - Comments

I'm really excited about this, such an amazing story! Can't wait for moreee

no dont take it down its wonderful

I love this story. (:

oooh Jon sounds hot ;)
And Gustav is so easily embarrassed!
can't wait for the next chapter =]

Gustav is adorable! Can't wait to see the characters grow more.
Update soon

I love this!
Gustav's character is so vibrant already =]
can't wait to see where you take this!

I really like this. And, I love art too, so in that way it's easy to relate to the main character.
I'm interested in learning more about these characters and their lives and just to learn more a bout them.
I think this is very well written, too. So, good job.
Also, I like the layout!
Keep up the good work!

First off, the layout you have for this is beautiful and sets the tone. (Considering the character of the first chapter kept referring to things being bland.)

One paragraph that really stuck to me was the description he gave of himself;
"I’d like to look like I had a long, complexion history. I’d like people to look at me and see something strange; see something that made them want to know me. I guess I wanted people to be drawn to me, like some miniature god. The thing is, I’m boring. Completely bland. Light blonde hair that might as well settle it’s self as white, pale blue eyes so washed out that I wondered if they held any colour at all, and skin that was sprinkled with a few small moles."

You have a talent for choosing the right words to fit the situation and mood, setting it very precisely and gracefully where I had no choice but want to get to the next sentence- even though it was a quiet situation in the chapter. Which is fantastic!

You are a great writer.(:

I like this story so far. I like how you establish the main chracter as having a passion for art. I liked the use of the metaphor about the moth and the light as it pertains to his sister. I also liked this line a lot I was forever lost in her shadow, trying to live up to the expectations she left behind.
I think that holds true for a lot of people with an older sibling who seems to be perfect or close to it. I also liked your use of the word shadow.
I only noticed a couple grammar mistaks, nothing major which is good. I think this story is off to a good start. Great job!

Ooops I keep accidentally clicking the submit button when I have more to say.

I love your writing style, and this story flows really well. It makes me want to know more about what's going to happen. keep going!

Layout is so creepy. I like it.

I found a few grammar mistakes, but overall it's really good. It's kind of confusing in the beginning though, but overall this is really good.

Wow, I feel I can really relate to that. My brother is the same exact way. I like your use of words. I got kinda confused about the moviing part though. Just don't try to change the subject so fast. But other than that I really liked it. Keep writing!