Blood and Water - Comments

Oh my goodness.

That was probably the most twisted piece I've read yet. The fact that the boy was eleven and committing those acts only added to the gore. I'm a big fan of torture in horror and you pulled it off in a classy way. (If, you know, torture can be classy.) The bit where he tied the yarn around the cat and used it as a kind of noose was genius, probably my favorite part.

Whoa… I'm entered in the same contest as you and I couldn't resist reading this because the title had caught my eye. The whole story kin of sucked me in and even though I felt like I should stop reading it I kept going because I wanted to see where it was leading. I don't think I've ever heard of this poem before, but now when if I see it I'll be reminded of this story x)

This was really good. No grammatical corrections, except to say that Kat up there used the wrong kind of *there* in her comment :P But any who, good luck!

wasn't* wow.

I loved this. I was a little unsettled by the layout and how many words there was, but I enjoyed it. Even if a kid so young did what he did and enjoyed it. I was left in shock by that and how smooth the story went. I mean, it was dark and all, but the words went smoothly. It wasn't rushed.

I wish the layout was a little different, but I loved the story. So I don't care. It's just weird with the blood at the edges. That's all.

The thing I loved most was how you put this together. I did like the words you chosed too. But that's what I loved the most. It was easy to read and I really didn't notice any errors. You probably fixed what the other person above me said.

Anywho, that's pretty much all I have to say. :]

My comment sucked and it is all over the place, but eh. I did love it and I was lying. <3

I really just don't even know what to say right now this story left me in shock, but I loved it at the same time, its crazy to think some one so young could do something so awful and enjoy it like he did.

I could feel the boys scardness as he was being tourtered like he was and I could picture the whole scene in my head as it played out you did well to describe what was happaning and how the other boy was loving what he was doing I think you did an amazing job at showing the boy slowly desending down a path of darkness and hate it was almost as if he was insane but not because of how he wanted to do what he was doing.

This story is just pure love man though at one point you had hope of hair wrote I'm thinking maybe you meant to say air instead and their where a few other spots that looked like they should have been other words then what you have other then that this was amazing and I'll be checking out the sequel real soon sorry it took so long to get this comment to you.

Much <3 Kat