Falling For Mr. Right - Comments

i loooooooooooove this story! please update soon! xoxo

Thank you so much for your feedback! This is my first time actually writing a fanfic and I have no idea what I am doing.

I've only read two chapter of your story so far but the problem i'm running into is your characters are just thrown in. There is no depth to them. its just hey here's dani, brandy carmen, etc. There is no, "The outfit fit her think lanky body perfectly." you need to be more discriptive about the girls instead of their outfits and elaborate on them, because it's mostly here's so and so and they talk for a while. I could really get into this if you made it more in depth. i'd for sure read it.