Party of One - Comments

Neat start so far. Superbly awesome, as well as highly well-written, too. I like it — especially this part:

The summer between my sophomore and junior year was spent painfully alone. I spent the entire summer at home. No phone calls from my “friends”. No invites to parties. Absolutely nothing.

Of course, I felt Ari’s pain at suddenly going from having friends to being without friends because of a falling-out; that sure can be painful for anybody to experience.

Anyway, keep up your superneat, phenomenally creative and beautifully cool writing.

I liked it.Its very relateable

Great Start.!

This is a very real, relatable topic for a story. I knew a girl who had her reputation ruined in a similar way.
I think it's a great idea and I like it so far! =)
The only thing that I would suggest is possibly double-spacing your paragraph breaks and to agree with visions_of_blasphemy a little more detail may help.
But I'm definitely putting this on my "watch" list.
Good job :3

This isn't my usual kind of story, but it's a pretty good idea. You've made a decent start, but nothing about the first chapter really caught my eye and made me want to read on. I think we could use a little more background information on the main character as opposed to scattered thoughts about a number of people. The writing was well done, just make sure to go over it for grammatical errors. There weren't many that I could see but there were a few. Overall, good job :)

I think you havea a good idea but I see a few issues with grammar and spelling. Not too bd, but definitely something you want to go over. Also, you should put spaces between the paragraphs. It makes it a lot easier to read.

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I spy a few grammatical errors but nothing that a quick proof read can't fixed, overall, I like where the story is heading. I'm wondering Arianna or her old friends did, that caused the girls to fall apart. :O You've really got some intrigue going on, which makes the reader want to know more! Good job!

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I'll be honest, I find the plot a little boring. Then again, it's only the first chapter so it's kind of early to tell-I definately think there's potential. The writing is really realistic and its done well, you almost start to become the character as you read it. Keep on writing! :D

It's very intriguing :) You gave away detail but you never explained what happened to her at the party. This story is extremely realistic and I think that's why everyone will like it so much. You described her feelings perfectly. The only critique I would give is to maybe slow down a bit but other than that, it is really good!

I love it :) makes me wonder what happened between her and her friends and why it happened. I love you how you discribe her feelings. The way you opened with how she was feeling made me stay compleatly glued to the story. :) Keep on writing.

Love the story :)