Stay - Comments

You used to be so beautiful, and then you fell into the gutter of New Jersey and stood up with heroin in your veins and insomnia in your irises.

:cheese: I actually have no clue how anyone can write this briliantly.

You know, darlin', you're like sand. The harder I try to hold on to you, the faster you slip through my fingers.

I just love those two lines.

I must say that I am love your story. It's breathtaking, poetic, beautiful, tragic. I honestly don't know how else to describe it. Everything everyone has said above me is true.

You are truly an amazing writer.



By the way, I love your signature and icon. Hahahaha. ;D

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Wow, this is simply just breath taking and amazing.
You're pure talent!

I just have to say that this is such a great story and such great writing with so much emotion and depth to it.
Wow, just amazing!

Thank you!
But, unfortunately, I've been neglecting this story. As well as all my others.
I tend to be a slow updater, but at least it gets done.
This is my most favorite story of mine. (:

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Wow, this is simply just breath taking and amazing.
You're pure talent!

I just have to say that this is such a great story and such great writing with so much emotion and depth to it.
Wow, just amazing!

It's been a year since you started this, Jess
And your writing is still as perfect as ever
I've always been so jealous.

Daresay, you influenced me, somewhat
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ILY

God, you're beautiful

I adore your writing.

aww, that's okay. :arms:

So I read this again and I saw my promise up there to review it...

But right now, I don't know why, but I'm suddenly crying. I didn't even realize it. I guess it's the combining power of your uncanny ability for metaphors and beautiful wording, and the very tragic and bittersweet storyline just moves something inside of me... even if it's to tears.

Sorry Jess.:arms: I'll come by and review properly again, but right now I think I need to go listen to cheesy pop music and have a feel-good, in love cry in a corner.

oh my god...
that is probably one of the best reviews I have ever recieved. ever.

thank you.

I've always loved the expression 'weaving a web of words', because it's always seemed so poetic to me. Never, however, have I found a story that has actually brought these words to mind as fittingly as this one did.

It was just so... I'm lost for words. Really, I am. It was beautiful, but at the same time, it was dreadful. It was original, I can say that with certainty.

I want to drown in the ocean, but I stay.
I stay. I don't love you anymore, but I can't bear to break your heart, so I stay.
I usually describe the bit I quote here, but I can't, the words are too true to be described, so I'm just going to say that it's beautiful. Really beautiful. It's so blunt, yet it's quite poetic. The whole story was poetic, and I usually don't go for particularly lyrical things, but I loved this.

Now that I look back, I realize that you only wanted to get fucked.
Again, blunt, but so emotional. I could imagine myself speaking this, it sounds like me, and maybe that's why I loved it so much. Obviously, I haven't been in those circumastances, but I really could imagine myself saying the same thing in that situation. And saying it like that, too; you captured a real person in your words. It's scary, how some writers can do that, you being very high on that list; how some writers can put a person where the character should be. Good, definitely good, but scary.

Instead, I used dirty lines and pretended to like it when you looked trashy for me because you thought it was sexy.
So blunt, so honest, so true, so perfect. This story is honest; the words aren't all huge, but it's just so perfect.

You were beautiful once, and then you fell into a gutter and stood up with heroin in your veins and insomnia in your irises.
Oh, that line is amazing. It's my favourite, definitely, it's one of the best things I've ever read. I can't describe it, because it's just so perfect. It's beautiful, and I wanted you to know that.

I don't know how to end it. It's a never ending carousel and the music isn't playing anymore.
As I don't know how to end this. I know this review doesn't do the story justice, it doesn't even come close, but I wanted you to know that I did read it, and I loved it, and I'm just so overpowered by the beauty of it that I couldn't give it anything worth reading.

I'm sorry, but I tried.

Never give up writing, you're amazing.

I'm gonna comment this properly as soon as I can.
It deserves it.

One of the most heartwrenching, emotional, descriptive pieces I've read in a while. Didn't expect any less from you, Jess.

wow, thank you! :hug:

I hope you know how amazing of a writer you are.

I've read a lot of your stories, but haven't commented on many, simply because they leave me speechless.

So anyways, in Stay, I LOVED how smoothly and naturally your sentenced flowed together without sounding run on, and repetitive.

Also, I loved the whole 'let's run away together' sort of theme, you really pulled it off. I could feel the naivety and youthfulness of the narrator, and the story wasn't cliche, or typical at all. You tend to always put your own tragic style to your pieces, and that's what I like.

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I hope to see more from you in the future.

♥