that was really good. I think your doing it right, but i have one question, is he gonna end up with the new guy or the old guy? (jw) or am i going to have to wait and read it??? O.o Oops. I guess that was two questions. Update soon please(:!
the first chapter is really good, I like how dramatic it is without crossing the line into overly dramatic. The next chapter however seems a littleā¦ rushed to me. But I dunno maybe as this story progresses it'll fit it :) Hope to see more soon!