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  • alustreya

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    Wittle PeePee.

    I have a bad feeling about this? She's drunk off her balls and suddenly confessing to David and he's just crushing like a school girl and it doesn't seem like this is gonna end well the next morning or whenever you never decide it's gonna take place.
    September 18th, 2011 at 08:08pm
  • cynicalqueen

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    I love the nicknames for Pierre, they're too much. I love the vibe with all of the characters, the dialogue really flows nicely when you get that. There were two typos, I figured I'd mention them quickly (I'm not trying to be mean, I just thought you'd want to know).

    “I jammed a tow when I tripped earlier. David caught me,” Genevieve explained, leaning into Pierre’s chest, eyes slipping shut." (I think you meant toe), and

    “Holy shit, did you get mailed by a bear!?” she asked, and Jeff felt his face grow hot. (I believe you meant mauled).

    Other than that, I loved the chapter update! It means drama, which naturally means I'm on board.
    September 14th, 2011 at 01:06am
  • alustreya

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    Okay, so I have this comments page open so that I can comment on some things as I read - just to amuse you.

    Chapter 5: Chuck, leave David's ogling alone. But omg you have no idea how hard I am laughing right now. The moment it was known that Gen was in a bra, I instantly died for David. KNEW HE WAS GONNA GET A BONER HAHAH

    Chapter 6: ohdeargod Pierre. That was sad.
    AHAHAH OHGOD JEFF! That was perfect.
    But akdjgha David. Gen. Gennn what are you doinggg. Is it bad that I think she already has a boyfriend? BUT NO, WAIT, I JUST GOT A NEW IDEA. uhm.. what if, she took on sexual favors? Like, one of those needed-money-so-provided-sexual-services moments in high school or early college or something... UPDATE.
    September 2nd, 2011 at 08:14am
  • cynicalqueen

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    I haven't read a Simple Plan story since their last album, this is pretty amazing. My favourite part so far? The line about Jeff's shiny bald head. So... more soon?
    August 29th, 2011 at 07:47pm
  • Synyster Lisa

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    The part about Jeff's shiny bald head made me giggle. I wonder what is up there. I know he's gonna walk in on something involving Gen.
    August 25th, 2011 at 02:32am
  • HeartFailure

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    HA!! Poor little boy!! Tee hee. Bless him getting all excited!!
    Loved it!! x
    August 9th, 2011 at 11:35pm
  • alustreya

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    Dawwwhhh why is he so cute omg.
    Shit, I forgot what I was gonna actually say.
    Oh yeah. Holycrap he's young... can't wait to see how this turns out.
    August 5th, 2011 at 05:24am
  • booboo01

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    Soooo cuutee!
    July 31st, 2011 at 11:19pm
  • HeartFailure

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    NO ONE CAN CONTROL THEMSELVES AROUND DAVID!! It's true =D Tee hee.

    Loved it = ) x
    July 30th, 2011 at 10:55pm
  • pawnsinplay

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    Don't control yourself, Gen. DON'T DO IT!
    July 30th, 2011 at 05:38pm
  • Synyster Lisa

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    Awww, she's starting to crush on David now!!!! How sweet!
    July 30th, 2011 at 06:42am
  • Z.Vengeance

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    This is super amazing!
    I love it :D
    July 29th, 2011 at 03:49am
  • HeartFailure

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    I'm not gonna lie. I don't blame her for not being able to keep her mind of that adorable little man!! Tee hee.
    Can't wait for more ducky!! x
    July 24th, 2011 at 12:05am
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    Pierre is the cutest brother ever, I swear to God. And oooooh David, denying the crush on Genny. WHO'S THE GUY THAT CALLED!? Man. I can't wait til next week!
    July 23rd, 2011 at 04:57am
  • alustreya

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    "Is he cute?" Am I gay?
    Oh I cracked up at that.

    Awhawh David and Pierre are so cute!
    July 16th, 2011 at 11:02am
  • booboo01

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    So good! =D I love the way your write =)
    July 16th, 2011 at 09:47am
  • Synyster Lisa

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    I love it so far, and what really has me interested is the title/summary, and wondering where it's gonna end up going.
    July 15th, 2011 at 03:49am
  • pawnsinplay

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    Ooh my God, woman, I just died and went to Heaven. Another Simple Plan fan-fic coming from you? Yep, definitely in Heaven. INEEDMORE! This is gonna be good :P
    July 8th, 2011 at 05:47pm
  • xPoppinxChampagnex

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    I finally got to it. Haha. It's really good so far. Can't wait for more updates.

    P.S. David really does have a cute nose. Haha.
    July 4th, 2011 at 07:18pm
  • booboo01

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    OMG! I am SO GLAD you're doing another David story! (dont know if you remember me but im a fan from Quizilla that read the first david story! ughh i cant waiiittttt :D
    June 29th, 2011 at 06:08am