Don't Leave Me - Comments

I saw the banner and thought this might turn out to be a sappy kind of love story or something like that, it wasn't and it was so sad I felt really bad thinking it would be so cliche. I really loved this. I think something I loved about it the most was that it was such a quick and short read but it was so ripe with emotion.

I was wondering after I read the first paragraph, who was this child being left with? Why wasn't there someone else there to comfort her? Why is her father leaving? (Though that is a more obvious question to answer I think.) There were so many questions running through my head and so many mixed emotions, this whole piece just made my mind whirl. Beautiful.

This is really sad :'( but I liked it and its well written :) It's great how you tied the two stories together and put in lots of little things to build emotion rather than straight out saying how she felt. Sentences like 'hugged my ratty teddy bear you gave me', 'ran up to the door' and 'edge cutting into my palm' all showed this.

A great scene told well in few words, well done!! :)

Oh, this really did crush my heart. I like how you had two stories and you fit two time periods so expertly into one little drabble. You're a really great writer and I think I'm going to have to check out more of your stories!

I'm going to be totally honest with you; this bought tears to my eyes. It's absolutely beautiful. At first, I was like, "How cool is that, to take something totally different from this picture." And then you speeded forwards, and it could've been cliche, but it totally wasn't. It just made it so much stronger. And I love that last line. Very well done.
Beautiful layout too, by the way.