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  • the fallen.

    the fallen. (100)

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    Let me tell you something, young lady. The way you write is utter beauty. You use words and metaphors and all that jazz in such perfection, it should be illegal. The flow of your sentences is just perfect. The last line was just the icing on the cake, She reeked of twenty thousand dreams

    SWEET BABY JESUS. THAT IS SO BEAUTIFUL.

    I enjoyed this very much Smiley You did a gorgeous job!
    June 28th, 2011 at 08:39pm
  • purple haze.

    purple haze. (220)

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    I love this piece!
    You used very powerful language and I loved all the metaphors about smoking. You've created a very interesting, classy character and I thought you did this well in so many words.
    Great piece, well done!
    June 24th, 2011 at 08:28pm
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