This was so amazing. I really enjoyed reading it and think you should write more like it! I love stories like this and there just aren't enough. So thanks. -Alex
Aw this was really cute and sweet. I love how the two characters are so different but love each other so much. I think its great how they switch dominance. You have fantastic grammar. I did see a few mistakes but nothing too major. I really liked the layout too. It went well with the story. Last I could say is keep writing and never let anybody ever tell you different.
I've read this a while ago and I forgot to comment 'cause I think I jizzed my pants, LOL. I love how this was so amazing, I rarely get to see things like this in a story where one was willing to bottom when they mostly top or something, I made one like this not a while a go too. But this is just beyond great and I freakin' love the pictures that goes with it. AWESOME!
Alright, so I fucking love you. Just getting that out there now. First M.I.A., and now this. You're blowing me away chicka. I loved this so much. You really portrayed their personalities greatly, and you made each of their dominance very clear. I was almost worried with this pair because of their differences, but you really took that and made it into something amazing, and it totally made sense the way you did it. I figured you'd be able to do it, so that's why I did give you the two opposite guys. I really adore the way you make them function as a couple, and they seem like they'd be best friends as well as lovers, which some people don't exactly put into their romantic stories. One part that I really liked was when Evan talked about Victor's reserves on showing weakness and, in a way, defeat. That really contributed to the overall effect of the story, whether it seemed like it or not. The only thing I have to say against this piece is that bit in the beginning with Gina. It didn't exactly flow with the rest of the story, because honestly, Evan could have explained about all of that in his thoughts or something like that. It's not necessarily a bad thing though, i think it's just more of a personal critique. But I'm telling you, you did a fantastic job on this story. I'd be super proud of it if I were you.
I LOVVVVED IT!!!!! Whoooo!!! And hey, this could end up becoming a novel later. Like a prequel. Ooooo that would be very interesting! Possibly a co write? Eh? Eh?