Coin Laundry - Comments

Hey, comment swap brought me here.
I think you should work a little more on your layout, it looks to simple, but it is good.

The story is really good, and I'm glad that you made this story for you, because it is something that I do as well, don't really care if people are going to like it or not, as long as I do. You write in a very goo way, and the characters are very sweet and well constructed. Nice job and keep up the good work.

This is an adorable story, Pat seems awkward and cute!

Got here from comment swap.

I like your layout, for starters. The title too.

I think your plot was strong, and your writing is good, I liked your descriptions and your use of language although it did become a little predictable.
Overall, a good story, well done.

CS: sorry, I forgot the 200+ character thing so, It was the normal boy girl romance thing, quite boring and normal. It also doesnt help that I'm not one that really likes romance, sorry but it still isn't enough, I'm so sorry I have to keep doing this, this is it this time, I promise. CS is just being stupid.

CS: sorry, I forgot the 200+ character thing so, It was the normal boy girl romance thing, quite boring and normal. It also doesnt help that I'm not one that really likes romance, sorry :/

CS: It was the normal boy girl romance thing, quite boring and normal

Comment Swap: Well, the story itself wasn't very intriguing; im not much interested in this kind of 'awkward love' nonsense, but i do want to give your writing praise. You write very well in first person i particularly enjoyed the line

I kept reading the same line in the Birth of Athena over and over, never really gathering the meaning

I could really connect to that feeling, and that is what makes a good writer. Bravo.

I felt the layout was a little simplistic, but it's fine. You could tweak it a little to make it more eye-grabbing. I couldn't spot anything grammatically incorrect, however. Some sentences might need to be edited /a little/ to avoid wordiness or awkwardness. Other than that, I couldn't find much else to edit. Good work.

-Joe

I so enjoyed reading this (actually I read it twice)! Ellie and Pat are so sweet. I really loved this story!

Elle and Pat are so cute! :)) I love this story!! <3

This is so wonderful. I cannot stress that enough.

Awe, I love Pat, and this story really did him justice. I love how adorably sweet the two of them are, and I know the feeling of talking to someone for hours and never tiring of it. I love the simple romanticism in this story and the way you write. Also, I think I've fallen in love with Pat a whole lot more... He's so under-rated and definitely the lesser-known member of The Maine, but he's gorgeous <3

i loved this. the sweetness practically made me cry. I know you probably will never continue it but i'll subscribe anyway and I'll be sure to subscribe to your other story so i can read it when it's set in motion(:

I loved this story. I loved how cute and uncomplicated it was. I mean I like the stories where there's tons of drama but it's nice to read a simple love story like this one because sometimes things just fall into place and life is uncomplicated. Anyway, I loved it and I'm definitely going to subscribe to your other story.

ahhh this story was so cute! hope to read more about ellie and pat in the sequel :-)

You never cease to amaze me.
I loved every single word in this.
<3

Oh my god! Why does this story have to be so damn cute!!!!! I'm literally squealing at how cute this is. If you didn't notice I kinda love this story :)

This story is so cute. I like how it's a simple concept that could really happen, sweet with no drama, and just overall adorable. Plus there aren't many stories on mibba about Pat.

Welp. I am highly disappointed with this. I almost forgot about the story! You haven't updated in forever. D:

I adore this story something fierce.
It's one of the Pat Kirch stories out in
the mibba world.

<3