Just Breathe - Comments

sweet but sad

This was written wonderfully. I bet you're one of those people that can write about the most mundane things and still make it interesting to read.
I can totally feel this main character's pain.
"No matter how badly I want to see you, seeing you and knowing it’s not real makes it harder to heal. Time can’t come in and fix the wound if I don’t let it."
Pretty much my life right there, in two sentences.
This is just beautiful. You captured the grief and loss part well. I really believed he was miserable.
Great job!

This was so depressing, but it was written so well.
It didn't even matter that I had no clue who it was about. It still got to me.
My favorite part was definitely the last paragraph. It was so beautiful and heartbreaking.
That was the point where I nearly lost it.
Anyway, good luck in the contest! You definitely deserve some sort of prize :]

....third comment the best?
Ugh, sorry, sweetie, but Emily and I spent two hours talking to each other and then my roommate left her phone and I was compelled to pick up her calls and awkwardly tell her friends she wasn't around. cheers to this

I’m not ready to let you become a memory.
Oh. My. Gosh. That line was the best, it was so intense and so incredible.

I'm pretty absolutely positive you mentioned this plot to me before but I don't know if the lightning scared it out of me, because I didn't realize what this story was completely about until I read the author's note, and then I read it over again :3

This was so incredible and intense, it was beautiful!
The bartender at first totally wierded me out at first, to be honest. Like she was takling through him, you know? It was just odd. but when I realized what the story was, I reread and everything turned out better the second time, haha.

It was so sad and just so asldkfjdskfjd cute, sweeet, sad awwww. You know?

Wonderfully written, and just beautiful!!

<3

Wow, that was fantastic.
Austin's emotions were just so real and heartbreaking. And the way you wrote everything was so powerful.
I loved the way you made it so it seemed like he was addressing her personally.
Everything about this one-shot was just beautiful.
Good luck in the contest! I hope you win first place. :)

This is SO good. Oh my God.