Ice Princess - Comments

thank you, I'll correct them. I thought it would be worse :)

In the first paragraph, when your wrote bike cycle it should've been a bicycle. Also on the same paragraph,

She never blinks and she drinks an awful a lot of mineral water. It should be an awful lot.

Soon after wards she won her first title. It should be afterwards. It's a one word, not two words.

Also, I noticed you tend to jump between the senses so it can get a bit confusing. Other than that, I think the story is great and I love how you use simple sentences and words but still the story comes out nicely.

This is really, really amazing. I was tearing up when I read about what made her become the Ice Princess. It's just absolutely sad and the way you write it is just... amazing!

There are some grammatical errors but nothing too big.

I love the way you describe her character and personality without being too listy. It just flows nicely and beautifully. My heart goes out to her and I can tell how lonely she is just by the way you describe her every day life.