September 6th, 2011 at 06:00am
In My Arms - Comments
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Hey well that really sucks but I'm here for you and a co-author? WEll if you really need one I could help...and I have to say even though it's been long I like it.September 6th, 2011 at 02:33am
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please update soon! i wanna see wat happens next! very exciting story and almost made me cry wen i read the part where she was dreaming about her mom...September 5th, 2011 at 11:38pm
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Ok, I like this whole shebang....but it left me wondering many questions, like for example why? Is Matt her dad or something, and it confused me at times. I like how it was in third, and in first yet I don't feel any of the emotions just Natalie's and I mean it's good just a bit more detail and explanation and it's all good. :)August 3rd, 2011 at 03:29am
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it was a cute chapter:)
nice to know kasey is warming up to people:)
update!July 13th, 2011 at 04:18pm -
Yay she's warming up to Matt a bit :)July 13th, 2011 at 12:20am
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I like the concept, and with a little work it could be a really great story. What you have now is decent but I recommend that you space between paragraphs and proofread because you do have a lot of errors. It might also help if you make the chapters a little longer. Writing in third could be a little bit better because it easier to write out the feelings that the character is feel oppose to first though first might be easier to read. It's all up to how YOU feel comfortable writing. And once your choose a point of view to write from go back and fix the chapters that are not in that point of view makes a neater story.
Also give a little detail on the characters, Natalie, Matt and everyone else because you have us in the blank about them.
Sorry if this is a bit long, I just wan to helpa bit to make the story better.July 12th, 2011 at 09:41pm -
oh and update:)July 11th, 2011 at 04:15am
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aww how sad but also cute. hopefully she learns to love mattJuly 11th, 2011 at 04:15am
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aww dats sweetJuly 8th, 2011 at 09:07am
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Have that whole butterfly thing come into play. If she loves him she will come back or something. Keep here there longer but the butterfly thing could work... i guess...July 6th, 2011 at 07:04am
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i love it
update soon plzJuly 2nd, 2011 at 07:55am -
Maybe eventually she will love him. He shouldn't of done it that way he should've tried harder In trying to adopt herJuly 1st, 2011 at 11:49pm
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I jus started reading this story and I really like it. pls update soon oh yea u should try first person anyway pls continue it's awesome!July 1st, 2011 at 10:42pm
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i like da way u have keep it
i love ur story n update soon plzJuly 1st, 2011 at 05:43am -
i would really enjoy this story if the chapters were longer, they barely get going and then they are over. please try and make the chapters longer.July 1st, 2011 at 04:45am
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1ST Person would be cool...
I love it update a lot please!!!!!!June 30th, 2011 at 10:09pm -
i like this so far . keep goingJune 29th, 2011 at 06:52pm
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Cool more soon ?June 29th, 2011 at 04:03pm
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Nice update!June 29th, 2011 at 02:18pm
i love it