I adore your summary. Clever, writing it like a book jacket :) I also love the plot line; very interesting. And your array of funky characters promises to provide a lot of literary entertainment.
June 21st, 2012 at 09:31am
I’ll start off with the layout. I really like the busy-ness of the background and the picture; I think it adds something to the story. As for the font of the summary, I find that blocky fonts make a story much harder for the reader to read than others. I suggest changing it to Arial or Verdana just to make it easier to read. Other than that, this looks like a promising start to an awesome story – as I rarely find stories that fall into the steampunk genre - and I can’t wait to start reading!
I really like the premise of this story – a brother and sister being evacuated from their home and torn away from their mother’s arms and sit on this cold train among kids just like them. My heart ached as I read this; having to say goodbye to their mother and leaving everything they knew behind. I actually thought this was going to be a story taking place in one of the world wars or even the American Civil War, but I’m surprised to find that it’s actually in a whole different parallel world. (At least, I think so, haha)
I’m already hooked deep into this and am excited to continue on. I’ll definitely come back to read more when I can. Awesome job! <3
