Homepage › Stories › I Am Wrecked › Comments

I Am Wrecked - Comments

  • Katie Mosing

    Katie Mosing (33815)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    32
    Location:
    United States
    I really like the way you write. You have nice sentence structure and your descriptions are really good. I didn't really like the first line, but I'm not sure why. It just didn't seem to flow to me.
    I thought it was kind of boring but that might just be because there wasn't much happening.

    I really like the line: "But Betty is gone and-- this time-- I know she will not be back"
    It is short and simple, but still conveys a lot of emotion.
    June 14th, 2012 at 06:29pm
  • nononononooo

    nononononooo (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♂
    Age:
    31
    Location:
    Canada
    I DIDN'T COMMENT ON THIS?
    (I love it. So much. Your characters are always so good, and such incredible use of words. You're my hero. When I grow up, I want to be like you.)
    July 7th, 2011 at 09:09pm
Homepage › Stories › I Am Wrecked › Comments