The story definitely fit well with the lyrics; in fact, you gave the words a very literal meaning, which was interesting. The grammar used was consistently good, and I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, which was excellent. (This is the first one I have reviewed with no noticeable grammar errors, so brownie points there. :D) I also liked the writing style; it flowed well, and was easy to read. I thought that the story could contain more detail. I would have liked to know how the main character got the scar - whether it was just an injury, or something that also contained some harsh memories and emotions (such as abuse). I would have also maybe liked to hear more at the end about what happened between the main character and the man in the supermarket. Great entry. :)
July 28th, 2011 at 05:56pm
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The story definitely fit well with the lyrics; in fact, you gave the words a very literal meaning, which was interesting. The grammar used was consistently good, and I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, which was excellent. (This is the first one I have reviewed with no noticeable grammar errors, so brownie points there. :D) I also liked the writing style; it flowed well, and was easy to read.
I thought that the story could contain more detail. I would have liked to know how the main character got the scar - whether it was just an injury, or something that also contained some harsh memories and emotions (such as abuse). I would have also maybe liked to hear more at the end about what happened between the main character and the man in the supermarket. Great entry. :)