Lucky - Comments

I am so happy someone is writing a set it off fan fict. This story is amazing and even If it wasn't set it off I would still love it.... I have read a lot of amazing stories on this sight and this one is great.

Okay, but honestly... that was so fantastic. Like, I could taste the tension. The awkwardness, the nervousness... it was all there! I could feel your feelings on it, just as much as Maxx and Jessie's. There were some editing issues you need to look over, y'know, no big deal.... I figured you just busted it out on me because I begged so much.

Okay. THE CONTENT. THE WORDS. The kiss. MY GOD. I'm not going to lie, and I'm not sugarcoating shit because you're my friend. It was flawless. F L A W L E S S. Completely and utterly one hundred percent Dessen quality work. Completely so! Especially the end. Oh my. The end.

Jealous and waiting and waiting and waiting....

You are trying to kill me.

Mission accomplished.

I CANNOT BREATHE.

This story is amazing and I can't wait for the next update!

Everything is beautiful and perfect.
The dialogue. The actions. Everything is so spot on and wonderful and lovely oh my goodness. I'm pulled in, and I just can't stop. And what is this? You turned Maxx from the pretentious douche bag with studs that we all know he is into this lovely, handsome saint of a video gamer and goodness. So many words. So much wonderfulness. I don't think I can go on. Living or writing. Compared to you.

- Swagg Queen Reviews©

oh my god. leaving for school now. comments later homes.
ljsut you slay semse s,mg me. ognshm bye.

MY TURTLE OMG :3

She nodded and smirked, probably already imagining a scenario in her head where I join Maxx and his friends for lunch, ending in him and me getting married and having ten ginger kids running around. mljlksjglkjslgjskgjkslgjklsgjklsgj

You writing their flirting in chapter 3 oh my fucking lord atlanta georgia... IT'S SO PERFECT. OH MY GOD JENNIE DROPPED HER FOOD OH Y GJSGKLSGN kill me.

AND AGAIN. the ending. your endings are perfection.

e chuckled and took a generous sip of water, wiping his mouth with the back of his hand. “And what’s your name?” he asked, twisting in his stool to face me better. “I mean, when I talk about you, I call you ‘The Non-Asian Yummi’s Girl.’ So much for creativity.”
cringing and screaming and crying and BURNING TO MY DEATH

kjlgtkjtsgljslkgjlskjglkjgs and when he thinks she's underage slgjskljgkslgjlskgj CRYING AND SCREAMING AND BURNING TO MY DEATH

and when he gets her number just jfc
and when he sorta kinda asks her out
and the ending
I'M NOT BREATHING ANYMORE

jfc julian you know how to make me laugh and cry and be happy over fictional messie like no other

I like this. Creative, never really seen this plotline before. =)

You tease.