Desperate for Closure - Comments

This broke my heart! Thoughts like that race through my head all the time. All the 'What ifs?' drive me insane! I'm actually sad Allison never got to tell him. That kind of closure is one that someone really needs. I really did enjoy reading this though. There were a few misspelling errors and misuse of commas, but overall it was really well done! (But at one part you wrote 'half hazard', did you mean 'haphazard'?)

I agree, your writing style is very descriptive, so many emotions, comparisons, feelings, etc. I like. Have you tried writing this in past tense? If it were in past tense, I think it would be a great maybe journal entry or something like that. I am a little curious on why is this character so negative. She ‘knows’ the guy wont like her back, but there is no evidence or example of an experience/flashback that would have given her that idea … well she has known him for 5 yrs so she should know him well ^__^ I was surprised at the ending. Not because of what happened, but because of how the beginning and middle were so detailed and then the ending was so short and fast. But it’s a good story :)

So I Came across this and i"d have to say the way that ended is horrible. Not in the way that I hated it but horrible in the way that you never got to tell him. I love your writing style.