Lies Within - Comments

NikkiFoxy8 (100)

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Thank you for the new update! Please update more soon!

October 1st, 2012 at 11:43pm

CaliCupcakeMonster (100)

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Keep it nd update whenever u can

October 1st, 2012 at 08:51pm

perfectxxangelx (100)

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omfg YES!!! I have been waiting for this for a while! I was starting to lose hope! PLEASE UPDATE ASAP

October 1st, 2012 at 07:51am

losing control. (4250)

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This reminds me a lot of The Vampire Diaries, but is quite a bit different as well which is good. It definitely has potential, I'm interested to know what happens in Alexander's life now that his soon-to-be wife is dead.

You do have a lot of spelling and grammar errors though. I noticed lots of words that were misplaced or should be replaced some that make more sense. You could also add more details in your story, to make it more believable and interesting to read.

It seems to have a lot of potential though, good luck with the rest of it!

October 1st, 2012 at 07:19am

lil_angel666 (100)

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Sounds interesting... Got more???

January 16th, 2012 at 08:49am

XxLyricalDeathxX (100)

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Keep pleasee

September 5th, 2011 at 01:49am

dawn8279 (100)

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I liked it so Keep

July 8th, 2011 at 06:04am