A Maid for the Mullens - Comments

This is aweeeesome.:3
I am actually pretty hooked on this.
More please!:) ♥

Also, I forgot to mention that I caught a few of errors in the chapter. Nothing too major, it's just me being a bit of a grammar freak and for that I do apologize.

“I'm Frederick, by the way Miss Gardner,” he introduced, as Amberly stood in the chilling breeze. She shook his hand, grinning like a fool. She glanced over hishoulder at the trunk that contained her belongings, but he pushed her towards the doors of the building.

“Why won't you play with me?!” she wined, her voice raising an irritating octave.

A young man waltz into the dining room, dressed in only a pair of athletic shorts with a towel draped over his shoulders.

Just a few errors like I said. But all in all, I did like the update and as I said before I am looking forward to the next chapter.

Awesome.
I liked the detail in the chapter. Definitely painted a nice picture in my mind as to where Amberly is now going to live.
Is Dex the butler of sorts for the Mullens?

Dakoda leaned over closer to Amberly. “Whatever you do, don't wear the maid's outfit Jonas gives you, because you don't actually have one.”
That was classic. ;)

For whatever I liked that Joe had no actual dialogue in the chapter but you still managed to instill a bit of his personality and character into the comments that both Dakoda and Flannery made about him.
Can't wait to read the next update.

I loved this.
The pace of the first chapter was great. Nothing was happening too fast and you took the time to set up what's going on in the story rather than just jumping right into it, which I really liked.
I also really liked the length of the chapter and I'm looking forward to your next update.

I liked this. Hope you update soon (:
*subs*

It's really good. Can't wait to see more. (: