Outcast - Comments

This story actually has a lot of potential. And your writing is quite nice. Along with your description, short, simple, but still I get the idea of what's going on. People do need to give this story a chance. I do have to say that it's not what I usually read, and i'm really sorry for that, but please don't let that discourage you.

Hopefully you keep this up!
:)

I liked the way you started it out. You have an amazing way with detailing and description; the writing is very intellectual from a stand point, and perfect. All in all this is one of the better written stories I’ve read for some time. Great work, keep it up!

I barely started reading it but I love it already :) keep going

prettty pretty pleaseee make another chapter??????????????

Okay, so at first I was like "Oh great, another emo/scene kid story"
But, you surprised me with the letter that Amanda wrote to herself, she was depressed but was smart enough to realize that there was no actual reason for her to be depressed, and that suicide was not the way to handle it, that taking her life would only be selfish for somebody who had been through nothing to become depressed, as opposed to those who have been through hell and had to live and deal with it.
Another thing, your grammer is impressive, and your vocabulary is very vast, I find sooo many stories on Mibba that I lose interest in due to bad spelling, bad grammer, and simple vocabulary.
You've earned my respect, and I look forward to updates.
I will also take a look at your other stories when I have the time.
Keep up the great work!