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  • AcidicHeart

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    Ok you got yourself a deal :D I'mma work now
    September 22nd, 2011 at 11:13pm
  • Dear? Drop Dead.

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    Haha ok so ima sound either like a total idiot or a total perv but: it was a sex scene and haha 'its longer' :b
    Now that that's over with...*ahem* I LOVE THIS STORY! Ima stalk it form now on! :)
    You write so well, I wish I could write like you >.<
    Anyways...PLEASE UPDATE! (: for me and my Gerard Way hair? (yes I have red hair like Gerard Way (: )
    September 22nd, 2011 at 05:20am
  • bobshit

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    I love this :3
    You could do to check through it for mistakes and make sure you've used the right you're/your or where/were/we're other than a few grammar mistakes it's amazing :3
    September 17th, 2011 at 07:13pm
  • glitter.poison

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    Ok so I'm just going to actually critique your writing. I may sound like a upright bitch but don't take it personally. Im just trying to help.

    First of all the first chapter was honestly painful for me to read. I know you may think Gerard is emo but that doesn't mean he has to be rude to his mother because you actually made her seem nice. Unless she's abusive or something. I didn't find this realistic at all. Sure, it normal to say you can't stand someone here and there but there's no need for Gerard to cuss in every sentence.

    Second, I found a few grammatical errors. Normally I ignore them but I'll suggest either getting a beta or using spell check.

    Gerard also seemed to have such a quick mood change when he met Frank. Frank also just snapped at him and then smiled and stuff. It was so unrealistic. Again I only read the first chapter so far. I'll try reading more after I post this.

    That will be all. Again, don't be offended. I'm not trying to go all "Your story fucking sucks. LOL." I'm not.
    September 12th, 2011 at 03:53am
  • SingingSinner

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    Hahaha they're so adorable together the hickey part was hilarious but Franks dad pissed me off :(
    p.s. Thanx for adding me :) it made me smile xD
    p.p.s. The reader above is hilarious xD
    <3
    August 27th, 2011 at 05:36am
  • Miranddraken

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    Well that's the end of my comment rape :D
    Hope you enjoyed :D
    August 23rd, 2011 at 04:01am
  • Miranddraken

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    Hehe I hope your story gets pregnant.
    August 23rd, 2011 at 04:01am
  • Miranddraken

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    Rape.
    Omg page claim!
    August 23rd, 2011 at 04:01am
  • Miranddraken

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    Comment
    August 23rd, 2011 at 04:00am
  • Miranddraken

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    Wtf am I not done with this page yet?
    August 23rd, 2011 at 04:00am
  • Miranddraken

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    And I think it's sweet Gerard is staying by Franks side ^-^
    August 23rd, 2011 at 04:00am
  • Miranddraken

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    Ok nvm scratch that XD
    August 23rd, 2011 at 04:00am
  • Miranddraken

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    Although it makes things interesting...
    August 23rd, 2011 at 04:00am
  • Miranddraken

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    And why is Donna bipolar now?
    August 23rd, 2011 at 03:59am
  • Miranddraken

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    But at least nothings broken
    August 23rd, 2011 at 03:59am
  • Miranddraken

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    I feel bad for the midget
    August 23rd, 2011 at 03:59am
  • Miranddraken

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    WHY DID FRANK HAVE TO GET HURT??!
    August 23rd, 2011 at 03:59am
  • Miranddraken

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    So yes... let it begin.
    August 23rd, 2011 at 03:59am
  • Miranddraken

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    So be prepared
    August 23rd, 2011 at 03:58am
  • Miranddraken

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    Comment rape you :D
    August 23rd, 2011 at 03:58am
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