We Are A Traffic Jam - Comments

  • fogbound.

    fogbound. (100)

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    Judging of Round Two for The Underground Competition

    Following Prompt 10/10
    Very nice with following the prompt. You did not let them escape and you used first person present. Oh wow is right. This was spectacular! The constant referral to being stuck and waiting around was great. I liked how you tapped into everyone else's conversations and instead of your character being the complainer he was more like the reasonable one. He took everyone's conversations and made sense of why we say these things or he questioned them, and I liked that a lot.

    Grammar and Spelling 9/10
    A few mistakes.

    Neatness/Layout 10/10
    Very neat, perfect font size, amazing layout. Stunning. Fabulous. Awesome.

    Originality 10/10
    Bravo again! It wasn't the typical stuck in traffic since you tapped into everyone else's stories. Great job.

    Effort 5/5
    Amazing word count!

    +1 for a link to my profile? yes
    +1 for talking about a bird? no (i could've missed it though tell me if i did)

    Total = 44 + 1 = 45 points
    July 14th, 2011 at 04:10pm
  • d0wn the rabbit hole

    d0wn the rabbit hole (100)

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    Oh wow, this is lovely. I love your layout as well!
    July 9th, 2011 at 10:34pm