August 11th, 2013 at 03:22am
I have to mention that since you wrote this for a picture drabble contest, it fits the layout so well and it makes it absolutely beautiful. This was spectacularly written.
I like how you wrote a story about how somebody is just sitting on the beach and thinking about his or her life. So often the beach is a place for fun and deep thinking and I like how you wrote about that. The imagery is wonderful and some of the things you say really stay with the reader. Wonderful job, I'm definitely thinking about reading more of your work, because this was very well-written.
I really like how he relates his mental state to drowning and how there's no difference between his situation and drowning in the ocean. In a lot of stories authors describe the ocean as calming and a place to collect your thoughts but they seem to be worsening his mood and describing it as somewhere that will burn and be painful. I like that contrast of views you have in here.
Adam seems to be such a tortured soul and I really hope that Adam (that I now see is your name, so you!) will start feeling better.
Overall, the way you used descriptions and imagery to enhance the story was wonderful; great job!