The Treasure - Comments

the_quick_writer101:

Very interesting! I loved all you have written. By the looks of some of the comments, this was posted about a year ago. Just as break.my.bones said, it was a little confusing for it to go from the point of view of the fox and then into her childhood. Either way, it was great! :)

ALSO!
I thought your layout was good! It was very easy to read your work. And I thought the picture you had was very creative!! Besides what you have written, that was what also what drew my attention to this. Again, I know this was about a year that you had posted this, but I do hope you come back and add to it!! I am interested in seeing where you go with this!!

Very interesting! I loved all you have written. By the looks of some of the comments, this was posted about a year ago. Just as break.my.bones said, it was a little confusing for it to go from the point of view of the fox and then into her childhood. Either way, it was great! :)

At the second sentence I was hooked.

Ahh I love this! Your descriptions are so wonderful and the way you write is so elegant! Plus I love foxes :)

I was a little confused though when you switched from the fox's point of view to Georgia's childhood; maybe separate the sections using ***? Or maybe have all of her childhood parts in the beginning, and then transition to her transforming into the fox