July 21st, 2012 at 01:19pm
The Vanity Effect - Comments
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*cries loudly* it's not fairrrrrrr, y w-would u e-end it with a c-cliffhangerrrrrrrr *sniffles* c-can't wait to r-read more update as s-soon as u c-can :) / :'(July 21st, 2012 at 10:12am
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No you can't end it there! Haha this was so good, can't wait for the next chapter! xoJuly 21st, 2012 at 09:59am
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I completely agree with Momo_92! And I hate anticipation! Update soon please! I love it!July 17th, 2012 at 09:35pm
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Yeah that was kind of really cute! I feel like Evan, crumbling for Samuel so easy haha. Damn. This was amazing, please update soon babe xxJuly 17th, 2012 at 06:42pm
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Wow if the reason tht Rhilee and Billy couldn't tell Evan tht Samuel missed their relationship I'm about to be upset I hope it's something more than tht becuz they simply could have told her tht he misses her being his girlfriend, they kissed and I don't think there is no goin back for Evam being pissed off, can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)July 17th, 2012 at 08:50am
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I'm so glad threatening to flip tables really gets my point across xD Thank you somuch for updating, but please update again soon! <3July 10th, 2012 at 03:33pm
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Okay, I am just dying to know what they're keeping from Evan! Loved this, Samuel makes me laugh :) Hope you update soon! xoJuly 9th, 2012 at 08:12am
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Wow I'm just speechless of this chapter I feel sorry for Evan becuz I feel like she has been lied to ever since her and Samuel broke up so I do feel sorry for her but she overreacted just a little, I wonder if Rhilee and Billy r goin to be persistent and try to talk to Evan, can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)July 9th, 2012 at 03:03am
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I'm loving this story so far! And I'm VERY eager to know what happens next! I'm like flipping through all of the possibilities in my head but, I'm not sure which one is right. I love the way you write as well. And, it is a very interesting plot. I also love the fact that you're in love with it. That's what makes it all the better! Update soon please! :DJuly 9th, 2012 at 02:34am
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OH MY GOSH!!!! If you don't update this story soon I will be forced to flip a table!! D: I really NEED to read this story x.x Please update soon(:July 8th, 2012 at 08:23am
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I hate to say it but Rhilee is being kind of a hypocrite in my opinion becuz u get mad at Evan for talking to Sam but here u r chit chatting it up with him like best fucking friends when u r mad at him for whatever it is tht he did to Evan, u and Billy and on top of tht u r pushing Evan away after u guys just made up sooo u should tell her becuz u practically begged Evan to tell u everything so u should do the same for her, can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)July 2nd, 2012 at 02:29am
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Okay, totally in love with this story! I usually only read fanfics on here, but this completely won me over. Excited to see what's going to happen with Ev and Sam. Update soon xxxJuly 2nd, 2012 at 02:29am
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Yay! They're talking again! now I wonder how will detention go for the two...hmmmm...can't wait for the next chapter!! ! update Soon :)June 29th, 2012 at 05:33pm
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Love it glad tht Evan and Rhilee r talkin again, can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)June 28th, 2012 at 06:39am
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-from comment swap.
Immediately knew I was going to love this from the title – so intriguing. I’d only improve it with a more concise, succinct summary page – I usually turn away from stories with such long introductions, but I liked the title and layout too much. I’d also really love some pictures on the character page, but that’s just nit-picking! Really well done, good luck with this.June 22nd, 2012 at 10:35pm -
Sam is a butt ..but great story!June 19th, 2012 at 01:09am
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I like that the summary really leaves the reader with a cliff hanger, even before you have even started the first chapter.
Okay, so you are really good at leaving chapters at the right place. And your description is amazing. I feel like I can really see all of this happening in front of me. You're wonderful at painting a picture in the reader's head.
I think you are doing a wonderful job! I didn't notice very many mistakes.
Things I noticed:
Punctuation in commentary in the first chapter.
"But, I'm sure Evan can speak for himself, Rhi." He finished with a smirk.
Should be:
"But, I'm sure Evan can speak for himself, Rhi," he finished with a smirk.
And you don't necessarily need the comma after the word but.June 10th, 2012 at 10:20pm -
I love how you're so into the story; it's probably what makes it so good, the fact that you love it so much! It's really good, update soon!June 9th, 2012 at 10:23pm
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I absolutely love this story and I wish I could just keep reading it (:June 7th, 2012 at 10:48am
Its like this story is becoming my life support. (Slightly Pathetic) ending with a cliff hanger is like.. completely unpluging my life support.. I could die soon if I don't read more. I:
Pleaseeeee update soon(: