Mind Suicide - Comments

woah, amazing story. there is so much that is said in each chapter even though they are so small. i would subscribe but the story is over. i might anyways just so i can read it again. love how the title is the last line. so amazing.

"a simple mind suicide." jesus christ this was amazing, i dont even know what to comment on first, whether the repetition of never and how it made it a whole lot more powerful in a sense and the first two paragraphs are great and how they're so contrasting. showing what he saw, and what he really was. A MIND SUICIDE THIS IS SUCH A GREAT LAST LINE IN A STORY I COULD CRY YOU ARE AMAZING

"a simple mind suicide." jesus christ this was amazing, i dont even know what to comment on first, whether the repetition of never and how it made it a whole lot more powerful in a sense and the first two paragraphs are great and how they're so contrasting. showing what he saw, and what he really was. A MIND SUICIDE THIS IS SUCH A GREAT LAST LINE IN A STORY I COULD CRY YOU ARE AMAZING

HOLY FUCK

SO GODDAMN GOOD "I pity her. I pity Hope. I pity my fat mom. I pity my fat dad. I pity fat." i loved that. and mostly i'm curious to see how it's going to end, i feel like it's not going to be a happy one and i never want this to be finished

This is really interesting. It gets straight to the point and is really effective even with the short chapters. Wording is also good, there is flow to the story, there is continuity and there is no pointless information.
The problems which many of us face - whether directly or not. How it controls your mind. You've brought it out really well.
The ending is going to be really interesting and something to look forward to. How will you play it out, I can't wait. A good reason why to subscribe.
I also like the layout, it gives a lot to the story. It was a really good read, I enjoyed it a lot.

i agree, i think this is my favourite chapter so far too. Hah! She eats. She’s pathetic. A dirty mark on anyone like us. Hope lost all control and it’s going to be me laughing, clutching my beautiful bones. i loved that part, and just the way everything is worded and how he's kind of taunting her throughout. i can't wait for the next chapter fuck

this has been my favorite chapter so far. i love your phrasing within it. i'll definitely have to check out your other work!

i'm sad that this'll be finished soon and i'm so curious to see what the ending will be like. I need to control my life. I need to control something. I won’t keep that meal down. I lie. I lie and go for a walk and throw it up in the park. i really liked that part. i feel like i've rambled about this before at some point but the sentences you write always have the best flow and make me pause and think at all the right times, it's great

lovely <3

LITERALLY FIFTEEN WORDS AND I STILL LOVED IT

LET BONES PREVAIL. WHAT A FUCKING PERFECT LAST LINE (this was really short but most of the time the shorter ones are the best and it managed to say a whole lot about the situation and what's going on with his parents and how his mom seems to care more or at least understands and doesnt wanna pretend that nothing's happening just because it'd be easier) i cant wait for the next chapter

I cry and I try to throw it up. I can’t. I didn’t win. Someone else won. i love that, the sort of eerie idea of someone else winning. this story's so real in a sad way, it makes it really interesting to read

Holy Shit!
This story is amzing

there's this story on here called blue film, it's my absolute favourite and i think you should read it if you haven't already because it reminds me of this in a way. (i loved the update, can't wait for the next one)

Grace is dead.

Grace got out.

this story is so fucking good, i really like how the chapters are short because i feel like it adds to the story somehow and makes it unique because it gives it a certain style

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I want to be beautiful. It’s the only way. I promise. i loved how you ended this chapter and fuck i really like where this is going already

Can't wait to read more! Seems interesting! Well done!

i'm so excited.