July 21st, 2011 at 01:28am
Lovely update (read late, sorry ><)
I particularly like the description of the mausoleum's interior. I can see it in my minds eye, and I can almost smell it.
I like this: Bryony didn't like how casual Sienna talked about such a barbaric thing, but she did as she was told and slid into the car.
It adds to the sense that she feels or realises that she has no other choice but to accept what Sienna says. However it feels as though she just accepts this too easily. I feel that, even if she does as Sienna says without questioning her allowed, there would be a bit more condemnation in Bryony's thought? I'm not sure.
Any way, very interesting chapter and, despite being a casual barbarian, I already like Sienna's character. She has a strong voice, and her whole character is extremely well put together.
I look forward to finding out more about Chang :)
I particularly like the description of the mausoleum's interior. I can see it in my minds eye, and I can almost smell it.
I like this: Bryony didn't like how casual Sienna talked about such a barbaric thing, but she did as she was told and slid into the car.
It adds to the sense that she feels or realises that she has no other choice but to accept what Sienna says. However it feels as though she just accepts this too easily. I feel that, even if she does as Sienna says without questioning her allowed, there would be a bit more condemnation in Bryony's thought? I'm not sure.
Any way, very interesting chapter and, despite being a casual barbarian, I already like Sienna's character. She has a strong voice, and her whole character is extremely well put together.
I look forward to finding out more about Chang :)