August 13th, 2013 at 12:23am
What I admired so much about this story is that it effortlessly started and ended with dialogue. Usually I have to groan when a story starts with dialogue because it doesn't always capture my attention, but yours did, and the dialogue at the end closed it up extremely well.
I also found it interesting how the boy had an attitude that Marla didn't understand things about the stars. She had such a fascinating thought process about the sky that I thought was cute and charming.
You captured a really cute moment in this drabble here in such few words and I loved it. Well done.
I really like how you added the dialogue throughout the story as well. There was a lot of it, but it didn't seem overwhelming or like it lacked description or anything, which was really nice.
I liked how the title tied in with the story, and how simple the layout was as well. I felt like it matched your simple writing style really well, and made everything seem like it flowed together really well, if that makes sense.
Lovely job!