Disgrace. - Comments

This is a very well written story. I like it. It's sad, and I like how you convey that so well. I can't help but to admire the main character and how she decided to keep her son, despite the fact that he was concieved by rape, and how she managed to stay strong through all of that.

First of all, I love you. One-shots make my day. haha.

I loved the concept of the story and how you played it out, but it just seemed really rushed. I know that it's for a few contests and such, but it's almost as if you were so excited for how it was going to end that there wasn't really much to put in the middle.

I do love the subtle characterization that's slipped in about Zacky though. It's like you didn't need to tell anyone anything about him because everything showed though. You could feel that she felt abandoned, but also obligated to take care of what was hers. However, I feel as though he was definitely lacking in the middle where he just disappears. I think that's what you were going for, but it just feels really empty.

Also, even though it's very cliche to use a phrase like 'throbbing member', it makes sense to use it in a rape scene, because that's the mentality in the whole thing. That would be all that she'd be focused on at the time, besides the point that she knows what's coming, and she knows where the pain is going to be and what's going to cause it. I like it, no matter how cliche.

I love the beginning. Everything starts out perfectly, and you set the scene up exactly how you want people to see it and I could tell that you were enthusiastic about it.

Overall, it's wonderful and I will take a look at the sequel :)

This was so sad and incredibly well written too. You wrote her emotions incredibly well, and set the scene for what was happening brilliantly.
showing me his throbbing member - this was the only line I didn't like, simply because the phrase 'throbbing member' is overused in a lot of sex scenes or rape scenes, and it would be nice to read something different, but apart from that there's really not a lot I can pick up on to change or anything.
I really liked the ending, especially when it talked about how one day maybe her mum might figure out who the real father is, and if Zacky will ever look at his son, the ending was very powerful, so well done.

It's great!
Well-written and really moving.
Good job! :)

Really well written.
The poor girl, and she never did admit to her mother what really happened.
:)

I loved this story, I didn't know what to expect when I saw the name Zacky Vengeance. The sad thing is I've thought about this before.

Awwww that was so sad :( :(

I loved it and I wonder if he ever thought that too!

I really loved reading this! It made me so sad at what she had to endure & I admired her for her strength to live her baby regardless of how he came to be.

This was really great. I never really read a story like this before. Very, very good.

I loved this. <3
It made my eyes tear up.