Deception. - Comments

This story is amazing, please update soon!

Please start updating again soon! I love this story already!

Please update soon!

Update please

I really like this one - update soon ay? :D

Hm. This seems pretty interesting although it's not the type of story I usually read. All in all, I'd say it's pretty good, but I caught a few errors that should be fixed.
Chapter one:
”look Will, we’re back in Huntington Beach” I tell my 3 year old son as we drive by the city sign.
-The L in "look" needs to be capitalized.
I never wanted to come back but I had to for my grandfather funeral.
-that should probably say "grandfather's funeral".
he has turn into a cute little chubby boy,
-"turn" needs to be "turned"
I gulp as the door opens but is happy to see that it’s my mom.
-"is" should probably be "I'm"
Chapter Two:
When he came into the kitchen and saw me there, I just got up and left the room, I didn’t want to stay there for the next part. I don’t take yelling and fighting that good, I could get a panic attack.
-These are run-on sentences. The comma after "room" needs to be a period. The comma after "good" should also be a period or a semi-colon would work there too.
I follow her to the kitchen and see Zacky sitting in a chair with his head in his hand, my mom turns around and looks at me then breaths in.
-The comma after "hand" should be a period or semi-colon. "breaths" should be "breathes"

It looks like their paths cross again O.o I wonder what she will have to say to her.

I love this(:
And the banners are amazing.