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  • celestial_royalty

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    Haha, I'm not sure the sex scene was necessary but it's funny the way you talked about it. I kind of want to have a glimpse into the battle with her in it, or perhaps her growing closer to Harry. I'd imagine Sirius would want them to be there for each other. :(
    September 5th, 2013 at 12:08am
  • kristyn_alysia

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    I don't think such a short one shot ever gave me so much emotion as you just did. I cried, so much. This short little piece made such an impact. I applaud this, very well written. It was absolutely beautiful.
    November 14th, 2011 at 07:45pm
  • chrissie.marie

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    This is incredibly beautiful. I loved the simplicity of the layout, absolutely gorgeous. And I loved the dynamic of Freya's relationship with Sirius. You managed to write this so that it seemed so effortless but still made a huge impact.
    I'm not sure if this was your intention, but as I read I imagined that Freya was a muggle. In my mind, she knew all about the wizarding world but was not an active participant. And that just made the story so much more beautiful to me. Well done.
    Your summary nearly made me cry, just so you're aware. Your style of writing is so incredibly powerful that even in the first few sentences, I already loved the story.
    Freya's interaction with Harry was also excellent, that she's unsure of whether or not Sirius had ever spoken about her (which, to me, just seemed to reinforce the muggle thing) and Harry reassuring her that Sirius had mentioned her loads of times. It was such an important dialogue and was done so nicely.
    Overall, excellent, excellent job. Absolutely beautiful. :)
    October 1st, 2011 at 04:37am
  • early_graves

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    This was so cute! Oh how I enjoyed it so! But it was also sad. I could feel Freya's emotions pouring through the story <3
    September 18th, 2011 at 12:45am
  • the fallen.

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    YOU HAVE SUCH A BRILLIANT MIND, YOU DO!
    Sirius was always one of my top favorites and this was so beautiful!
    I did break my heart, I'm not gonna lie. ;____; but it made my night.

    Keep on the good work!
    September 5th, 2011 at 02:04am
  • Draco.Malfoy

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    First of all, I love your story layout. It seems so effortless yet it's made an impact already. I have never been one to read a Sirius one-shot or story, this is my first, and I absolutely enjoyed reading this. The words flowed wonderfully together and the ending was great. I can't wait to read more of your stories.
    August 17th, 2011 at 05:47pm
  • the-tommo;;

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    YES FIRST COMMENT.
    And this was so cute(:
    You know how much I love Sirius.

    SIRIUS IS SUCH A NICE GUY.
    WHY OH WHY DID HE HAVE TO DIE?
    August 17th, 2011 at 02:30am
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