I absolutely love how detailed you are with your characters and the fact that this is a smut makes me love your story even more! Keep it up :)
June 17th, 2012 at 09:15am
I love the layout - it is cute. But the yellow links are hard to read.
As for the story, I like your use of metaphors and alliteration. This line in particular stuck out to me, ...it was as if all the life had been sucked from her in one swift drag, leaving the hollow shell to crumble to the floor and collect like ashes beneath their feet.
I like your writing style. This was a nice piece. I'm surprised that this doesn't have one comment, despite the fact that it was published almost a year ago.