Fractured Fairy Tales - Comments

A lot of time has clearly gone into this, your grammar is good and your writing is very descriptive. I wasn't a fan of the Wizard of Oz, but this dark version of it is definitely kept me interested. Really amazing descriptions, I got a clear picture in my head of every bit, which a lot of stories don't have.

Keep up the great work. :)

I know everyone is saying they like the idea of Oz and your probably getting tired listening to it. But I'm going to say it again. Great job!(: This is really interesting. I like it a bunch.

Very good so far! You do a good job of starting off vague in the beginning and gradually adding more and more detail. Though not too much, because it's the first chapter and you want to leave so much left to fill in.

You also do a wonderful job with grammar and spelling. It makes a story 10x better if someone does that. You've obviously put a lot of work and thought into this and I appreciate that, as a reader.

My one complaint is of the layout. I found it distracting while reading.

Other than that, amazing job! I really liked it. Super interesting.

Holy crud. This was so intense, insane and just plain awesome. Nate is such a jerk, but you probably already know that because you wrote him to be that way. My favorite part of the first chapter would be the effed up version of The Wizard of Oz because it was always such a happy, wonderful place. But this version isn’t; in fact, it’s the complete opposite.

The only thing that bothered me was the layout. The picture is beautiful, but I found it a little hard to read the text that was over it. But that way my only problem. Even though it’s only the beginning, this story is interesting and fantastically written. Great job and good luck!

I love the layout.
I love the way you written this so elegant and real good imagery.
I will subscribe and read on. Sorry not much to comment yet /:

Okay, I won't lie; the layout made this a tad bit hard to read. I had to read it with the default layout on, sorry >.< Anyways, this was very nicely written and the concept of a girl going to an almost post-WWII Oz was definitely something that I haven't seen on Mibba before. I really like her change of outfit too; obviously different than blue gingham and sparkly red heels. The rest of the content was just plain weird. However, I say that in the best way possible! Reading the part where Angela kills Glenda seemed a bit painful to me because, well, I really like Glenda. >.>

Overall, I found this very enjoyable. Lovely job!

I think this is very interesting and will continue to be so I am subscribing.

I can't wait for the next chapter. The first was amazing.

Wow entertaing. Wow what an adventure!. I would have so just drive around the land of oz and played my radio and get a gun and shot the green witch. Then I would crash the castle and I would sleep on a bed and pretend I was a guest!.
High fives for creativity!
plz read my story. And tell me what you think about the layout.
Hula girl

Ha! This is awesome! I'm sorry I didn't comment earlier I didn't see your comment on my journal.

I like the idea, of a crazy Oz. And I'm guessing that each land will be out of a different movie since you said 'Christmas Ghost.'

No bad spelling mistakes nor bad grammar, the only thing I suggest is making the transition longer or putting a divider between where she's in regular world and where she's in her Oz. It'll make it easier to read.

I love the layout, and normally I don't like layouts that have pictures of people as the background but this one is good.

That was... wow. I was not expecting that.

It starts out as one type of story, and then it moves into a completely different kind! I have to say, this is really really good.

I feel that maybe the transition happened too fast, I was like wait, what? because at first the story is completely different and then boom! It changes pretty much instantly. I dunno, I think you should have made that a little more drawn out or something, but that's the only thing I'd change, everything else is perfect.

This entire world is filled with the places you’ve come to love, and everyone here has gone crazy. I’m the only sane one left, but I’m slipping.”

Love that line <3

Great job!

Wow, it's pretty good. I like the way you described Oz as distorted and all, and I like how Glenda was all sickly pale and seemed not to really care. My favorite part about this so far is how Angela was about to curse but cut her own self off by saying something else. I found it funny. I'm also glad that I chose that picture for the layout, I think it fits the story better than the others did, it fits the Angela character more. Keep writing, and I'll keep reading! ^_^

this is wow, i love it. The description of oz is great and easy to see clearly. The latin at the beginning is different and amazing and really fits in. Can't wait to read the rest of this it's amazing. Really good job:) oh and great layout:)

Oh wow this is so cool. I love it. the description of Oz was so amasing. I'm deffantly subscribing. I also love the layout, normally I don't like the ones with the words of the right, but I don't mind this one because it is so pretty. I wish I could find something to help you with, but I love it the way it is. :) Keep on writing, I'm off to subscribe now.