Hourglass - Comments

Your descriptions are utterly amazing and vivid.
I love the layout.
I hope you keep writing and adding on to this story it is well written and amazing.

:O I loved it! Your descriptions were very very vivid and the chapter in general was well written. It flows naturally and makes me feel as if I were sitting there beside her.

I really thought she had a sickness and was going to die until the last few paragraphs when I noticed she was only moving. I don't know if that was your intention but that's what I thought.

All in all I hope it does become chaptered. :) I loved this :D

This is probably the loveliest piece of written work that I've read so far. I love how you describe the hourglass in the summary. I think that my life is sorta like that too. Absolutely beautiful! I also love how you begin the prologue. It really gives the readers an insight into the character's mind; the way she sits, the way she thinks, the way she feels, the way she remembers the breeze. It's just so beautiful and clear. You definitely have a wonderful way with your words. The little cliffhanger at the end was a nice touch. I really think that you should continue this. It's lovely and really, really deserves more comments than it has. Absolutely wonderful. Amazing job! <3

This is a very interesting piece. I love the metaphors you use throughout the piece, especially the one to the hourglass in the summary, I thought that was a beautiful idea.
You have a very nice writing style - I found it easy to read and the flow of the words was lovely.
I thought the ending of this was especially nice, and a great cliffhanger for a drabble like this.
Great job. Well done!

Some background, if you're coming to comment- I'm moving to Ontario, Canada, from BC on the 25th of August. I'm both terrified and exhilarated. I'm not sure if this will continue or not, either. It sort of depends on whether or not I'm feeling overwhelmed.