City of Ash - Comments

Hon, it didn't matter that the story was short. It was a tear jerker! That was deffinatley a lot of emotion put together into one little piece! Even though, I liked it. I think that if you felt up to it, you could turn this into a full fledged story. This could be like the prologue and the whole story explain what lead up to that. If you ever did that I would love to read it! Great work you did here :)

I really like Samael. I feel like he may have been in a war because you said "his trip overseas". It makes me feel as though he saw something bad while he was at war and he can't seem to get it out of his mind. Your story made me do a lot of thinking and I really like that. It was short, but to the point.

Comment Swap brought me here. I really want to know the back story to this one-shot. It's written well, but without a back story it lacks explaination as to why he would kill himself or why he wouldn't have said good bye to anyone before he left. Overall it is good though!