Mysteries of the Universe - Comments

This was absolutely amazing.
Dean and his dangerous thoughts are the same as mine and everyone else's.
People tend to get way in over their heads and make us do some idiotic things at times but I am glad that he had come around and Cade was not being a douche and understood his boyfriend's demeanor and also came around of his ways.

This was a wonderful read. :)

That was so cute. I like the format of the story and how it was written. Are those the same thing? Oh well.
I like how he's always pondering somehow. This was just so cute and well written.
Lovely job :)

the font's a little small but oh well.

With that being said, damn. That was really poetic and deep o.O Which is saying something because I'm usually not one for repetition in a story (poems yes, but stories no). I liked how Dean's train of thought was so unique. Like how he was bored out of his mind waiting for his boyfriend to remember him that he started contemplating the universe, or how he sees a deeper possible meaning to two different shirts. The way he 'broke up' with Cade made me think, "huh, well I'll have to put that away for future reference." Then again so did the way he apologize.

Overall the ending left me with a smile on my face and I found myself also pondering the mysteries of the universe. Wish I could weave my words in my stories as well as you do ^.^ Good luck in the contest!

Whoa...I don't even know what to say.
Just whoa.

This is great. Fantastic. Outstanding. All of it.
The end got me smiling, and I haven't stopped.
That was adorable, and kind of gave me hope that I'm not the only one out there who over-thinks every little thing.
If this is anything like your other pieces, in the way it portrays you as a writer, I'd say you're definitely in for some greatfantasticoutstanding written adventures in your future. Like watson. said: You're going places.

Wow.
Holy shit that was cool.
Way cool.
Like, I don't know what it is about this piece, but it's fucking fantastic.
If you had my AP Lang teacher from last year, he'd love you. Your language...
You're going places with your writing.

Good luck in the contest.
xo