Flames - Comments

I like the way you described this simple motion. For some reason though, I kept thinking she'd fall back away from the flame instead of kneel down in front of it, but it's fine since there wasn't a real distance between her and the flame mentioned. Oh, and I like how you described the flames as dancing, it added a light touch to the drabble. Great job again :')

I enjoyed this. I'm not sure if there's a more detailed plot or thought wave behind it, but I enjoyed it. You were very descriptive to begin with, I liked that. For a first drabble, you did extremely well. I know their not the easiest, trying to sum so much up in hardly any space.

My advice is try to rephrase what you're saying. Play with your words and use more descriptive grammar to save you writing an entire sentence that could be summed with one word. I'd also consider rephrasing the last paragraph, in my opinion it didn't read very well.

Well done for a first try and I hope you do well in the contest!

I think this good use a bit of re-wording. Using the same words over and over -especially in a drabble so short- takes away from the story, I think. Keep it up, though; I see a lot of potential. With a bit of editing and development, this could be great. (:

I think it was really good. Captured the essence of a drabble.