I loved it, but I am a bit confused? Did Claira kill her mother and Billy because she was craving his sisters attention? is that what she meant at the end?
First off I would like to point out that you might want to check the verb tenses throughout the story. You seem to switch between past and present quite a lot.
That being said, I definitely like this story. The way you portrayed the young girl and her feelings is impressing. How she is so disillusional she doesn’t seem to realize what she is doing and how at the same time she won’t let anything stop her from getting at her sister. It’s unnerving to realize these things actually do happen in real life.
I also love the banner, it’s simple but fits the story perfectly!
Beautiful. :) I like the way you portrayed the little girl's insanity.. The fact that it was a little girl and everything made it exceptionally memorable, as well as creepy (in a good way). Fantastic job!
Firstly, congratulations- you just pulled something off that few can; a story about insanity that is logical, sequencial & believable. In a way, this kind of reminded me of the movie The Uninvited: an American remake of a Japanese horror film called A Tale of Two Sisters. The way Claira acted towards the profilers was really well done, as was how you had her thought processes throughout the story although this could be taken as Claira was living in her own world in her head & doing the killing without really knowing it. Well, until the end when she said that Billy & her mother got in her way. That was a really chilling line. I loved this, great job!
Gosh, it was amazing.