Le Monstre - Comments

This was certainly a great read, I like the vibe to this, that creepy creepy vibe. In chapter 1, I find it great how you describe the things that really 'showcase' to the reader [and to the girl herself] how she was this monster. From her cloudy eyes, sharp bones, translucent skin, to her non-working vocal cords, it was all good detail to add to the effectiveness of the situation.

I also like how it wasn't too much of a happy ending, like you stuck with the ideal of her being a monster to the end. I have to agree with the others, this was pretty good, and I'm glad I finally got around to reading it.

Omg, This is absolutely amazing, i'm speechless, it's really well written, there's no one word to describe just how great it is. Again great job I love it

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I'm so glad I came across this. It's horrific and amazing and filled with pure awesomeness, this made it to The Ultimate List :)

This was twisted, but I loved it.

You cant helpbut feel bad for the gorl. She herself is convinced she is a monster. And when,she just describes the hell she is in- it is so vivid. I could just imagine what it would be like.

The second chapter was sad, but interesting. That musr be a lretty screwed up town c:

This was terrifying! I've never read a story like this so I'm sitting her at loss for words! <3 Absolutely brilliant. I can't even pick out favourite sentences to comment and italic because I loved too many of them. Wow. Just really, really good. <3

Wow. Okay.
This was horrible.
Haha I'm totally kidding :D

Wow...this is one of the most descriptive stories I have ever read. Your lines were so moving! I kind of felt bad for her, because she barely got any food and had to drink dirty water, and she could never have a source of happiness. She was a...a beast. D: I feel so bad.
Your interpretation of the picture was absolutely amazing. There could have been so many ways to interpret it, but you did it in an amazing way, and it's definitely an original idea. I really love it.

Surprisingly, I have no critique for this. Usually I find something off with the story, but I really found nothing. I loved how you put the title in French, that was really creative and fit the story very well. The layout was nice, and the background was a simple pattern, so that was fun :D I'm glad the story area didn't hurt my eyes, that would've been a bummer aha(:

I really love this story and I think you did an amazing job. <3

This was amazing :D