August 15th, 2011 at 06:32pm
I liked it! I did notice a few runon sentences, and places were a comma should have been, but besides that I thought the main story was pretty good.
I do like Jasper, and how the way you porttayed his attitude was a little different from how I usually see it! :)
I love the concept of the little one-shot and the way you describe things. Very good.